Progress with the Great Rapture Editation: First two acts pretty much done on my part! That took a while. Might still need to work on them, for all I know, but the bulk of it is over. Next up on the list is to apply these standards and consistencies to the last acts and also add a lot more.
Basically really the work has only just begun. Cue the exciting music.
Also here’s a thing. The main reason I’m sharing this is because I first heard it in The World’s End (that thing the video says) which took a while to grow on me but at this present moment it’s probably one of my top three favourite films ever ever ever. It makes me freaking cry, it is exactly the kind of bittersweet metamorphosis story I love, and it’s by Edgar freaking Wright.
BUT THIS IS “THIS CORROSION” BY THE SISTERS OF MERCY
WHICH IS A DAMN GOOD SONG TOO
AND IT ELICITS VERY AMAZING FEELINGS IN ME
So first of all I highly recommend The World’s End to anyone willing to either be entertained or analyze a whole lotta hooey, and secondly THIS SONG IS GORGEOUS
Painted by Wiratomkinder
I can’t even fathom this thing.
This is probably the representation of the culmination of everything Rapture’s fourth act stands for. I don’t even know. I just seriously love this.
…*ahem* Right, so. This is an impressionist painting of Jordan mourning Salmacis.
CASUAL REMINDER THAT THIS EXISTS AND THAT WIRATOMKINDER IS REALLY COOL GO FOLLOW THAT WONDERFUL HUMAN
New art? For the Rapture logs? Ambitious new art? Symbolic new art?
Only one way to find out!
I’ve gotta say, all this time I was worried about Act II when Act I has some of the most pointless shit in it. It’s taking me quite a lot of editing to make it feel like any of it’s going somewhere.
Also I’m constantly getting the urge to replace every real name that isn’t Jordan.
…also really everyone’s gonna want to reread Rapture when this thing is done, I’m changing more of the story than I’d expected to. The story’s turned from just being a metaphor of my coming of age to a sort of thing where the story itself is self-reflective.
I think it’s safe to say I just really love editing.
I’ve finally started working on the logs again. Soon, the world will get to read the exciting lucky-number-five fifth draft, which is probably the heaviest-edited of all the drafts so far. There’s more intrigue, more insight, more philosophy, more screentime for pretty much every other character,…
Man, I remember reading this story quite a while ago (the original drafts/posts, i believe) and I got really far IIRC, but then I forgot where I was. I pretty sure I tried to reread it twice now, but both times I guess I got to like somewhere in Act 2 and stopped.
Hearing it’s getting a new draft that seems like it fixes my biggest annoyance with it (the sexual stuff in the original posts really seemed hyper-wish-fullfilment-y most of the time which kinda took away from the surrealness) makes me really happy, and that + the apparent changes make it so I’ll probably actually read this through this time.
Really good memories of the more “adventure”y parts of this thing. Like the just surreal wandering through the rabbit holes and the random crap that happened, and the RPG-esque enemies and… yeah. Kinda disappointed the copyrighted lyrics are gone even though I didn’t actually recognize any of the songs whatsoever, I just… felt they were cool just from being in the story. The other improvements make up for it, though, haha.
Now I’m excited for this!
It sounds like this one will be right up your alley. I should say, though, that there will still be some moments kept from the original that probably felt like wish-fulfillment in that draft, but those moments will be polished as much as I can to make it clear what I had actually intended the emotional reaction to be. Rapture was a weird story, a massive experiment at times, and I wasn’t really experienced enough to handle most of the stuff I had in mind.
Basically, in this new draft, if a moment is meant to be a show of Jordan’s flaws, it will be made more clear. if a moment is meant to be Jordan lying in his journal, it will be hinted at way more. And stuff like that. And if there’s a passage that seemed like it didn’t have enough going on for its pacing in the story, I will add to it or take it out entirely. Among quite a few other things. This draft kinda feels like a different story at times, but I definitely want to keep that dream-like sensation of exploring rabbit holes. I just also want way more emotions felt in the audience, independent of Jordan.
As for the copyrighted lyrics, their removal is more.. a clue as to what this definitive packaging will be. But hey, there will still be a lot of lyrics in there, just not real ones. I will agree that they gave the story a fun music element at times.
Oh yeah, and fun fact for everybody: There’s no longer four acts. I’m pretty serious about editing this shit; I even rewrote the opening logs, which had remained pretty much untouched for years.
Really, I hope people’ll look forward to this. Might be more surprises down the line too.
..also hi thank you for the follow. :D
I’ve finally started working on the logs again. Soon, the world will get to read the exciting lucky-number-five fifth draft, which is probably the heaviest-edited of all the drafts so far. There’s more intrigue, more insight, more philosophy, more screentime for pretty much every other character, more hints as to intent, and even less problematic stuff!
The fifth draft will replace the fourth as canon, obviously, so this does mean there’ll be a bit of confusion in some aspects unless you choose to reread the logs entirely to pick up on all the new stuff. But as with the fourth draft coming in a definitive PDF copy to encourage convenient rereading, the fifth draft will come in even more definitive packaging. Trust me, everyone and their mums is gonna want in on Rapture by the time it’s released.
The definitive packaging, however, will include substantially fewer pieces of art. Substantially. Exponentially. We’re talking “Was 85, is now about 6.” Six pictures, give or take, including the front cover. Only a couple artists, too. All the remaining art will remain on the site, of course, and will still be official and plugged like crap. This is for.. packaging reasons. Won’t affect the reading experience too much, hopefully. Will not comment on whether any of the art will be new, will only put the thought in your mind.
Other changes: No more foreword. Maybe a little few-sentence one. Just yeah no I’d rather drop the reader head-first into the apocalypse and let them figure out the questions themselves. Don’t worry, the fifth draft is different enough from the previous ones that I think you’ll find I’ve rendered the foreword redundant anyway. I’m trying to hype something up here, for the record.
Did dabble with the idea of changing Jordan’s name, fictionalizing him more. But no. Jordan will still be Jordan Dooling. Call me crazy, ridicule me, dismiss me, but I honestly believe the self-insert element is key. The logs would still function as a story without it, but it’d be like asking a songwriter to change a personal song so it’s no longer “I” but “He.” It’s not necessarily worse, but it changes the dynamic quite a lot, and Rapture would not feel like Rapture if the audience wasn’t consciously aware the author’s psyche was being thoroughly scrutinized.
As an idea of how different the fifth draft will be, the start of Act III has been entirely rewritten from scratch. Even more sexual stuff has been toned down or, in most cases, entirely removed.. Every copyrighted lyric has been removed. I have added something to every single log, even the tally mark ones. The early acts have more perspective to them, what that means I will not say. The binary’s also under debate, might rework some of it if for no reason other than practical packaging concerns.
Progress so far: SlendySlayer has put a good several days, total, of work into it and she’s only halfway done on her end. I’m about a quarter of the way done on my end and it took me about two consecutive days.
I’m taking Rapture absolutely seriously, and as a result I will not allow for any awkwardly problematic passages that do not work towards the rest of it. These are the Rapture logs the Fear Mythos deserve, and that you patient followers absolutely deserve.
Now I’ll get back to work. Just wanted to give an update. Hope you’re looking forward to it.